Despite the humor and plot, I found the sheer amount of random sex to be obnoxious and distracting. I REALLY wanted to follow the development of the story, but instead, the two main characters were constantly getting naked. I’m also not a huge fan of the crude anatomical terms, but I’m aware that it’s a personal preference and can look past it if story quality permits. However, there were some beautifully romantic scenes that were, for me, ruined by the random insertion (pun completely intended) of “cock”, “dick” and “pussy”. Also, no matter how attractive a person is, I found myself scoffing at the fact that Chloe’s “nipples pebbled” just about EVERY time she saw Max.
Overall, I found myself focusing on the author’s voice and presence rather than the story, which is not a good thing. But, I give this story set 3.5 stars because it is not entirely without merit, and I think the author has great potential should she tighten her style.
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